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Nowadays it is common for people to get married in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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Today many chose to marry when they reached a certain
age
 like in their thirty years old or beyond.
However
, in my ,mind
this
 decision has more advantages than benefits. As one prefers to get settled late, they may lose the passion for married life and their child-caring skills could suffer in older
age
. Most men and women lose the passion for sharing their emotions at an older
age
.
In other words
, The young spirit and freshness tend to get decrease by the thirties or later.
As a result
, they will not be able to enjoy their marriage fully as their time for some sort of things like getting a child perhaps could be limited.
For example
, many couples wish to give birth to their children two years or so after their marriage and when a person gets married in their thirty biologically they have limited time for having a child. Most adults in their thirties are not fully motivated as they were in their twenties.
In other words
, many youths have lots of freedom at younger ages as they are not busy with making money or working so they have a clear mind to take care of their children. But as people get older their patients may suffer and perhaps dealing with a crying baby could be a harder task for taking care of them. To conclude, the emotional motivation of males and females is decreasing with older
age
. lack of attention to children and not enjoying married life could bring with it some unfavourable effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • personal growth
  • mature and stable relationships
  • rates of divorce
  • family conflicts
  • thoughtful and compatible matches
  • self-knowledge
  • healthier families
  • stronger community ties
  • declining birth rates
  • aging populations
  • workforce replenishment
  • economic sustainability
  • higher quality of life
  • financially and emotionally prepared
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