Some people think that mobile phones are harmful for children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give Your opinion

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With the development of high technologies, the mobile phone, as a new invention in the 20th century, has been becoming more and more popular among
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, especially young generations. It is widely accepted that smartphones bring about considerable unpredictable dangers.
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, one portion of
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is strongly in disagreement. As far as I am concerned , in
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I will explore some points and put forward a few arguments. On the one hand, modern technologies like smartphones, computers and laptops, are the most useful tool which enables to inform
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of the latest news and recent developments in the world. What I mean by
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, is nowadays, many open educational resources where the well-qualified tutor's work is operating online on social media
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as youtube, Instagram and telegram with the view to teaching
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more knowledge easily and perfectly rather than the beaten knowledge in textbooks and obsolete methods which have been used in traditional education.
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, if
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exploit the mobile phones in need correctly ,
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influence not only the qualities of their study at school
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their horizons.
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, every coin has its two sides and it is generally admitted that the disadvantages of using smartphones are undeniable. When young
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browser online on a phone
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capable of revealing everything with a huge speed, they might come across some inappropriate adult content.
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, internet fraud has reached a peak significantly over the years.
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, the videos or pictures posted on social media may be with regard to violence, crime, and pornography content and so, and
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cause making
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walk on the criminal road. To sum up, based on my observations, undoubtedly, the government and parents should and can prohibit the unhealthy contents on the phones and provide
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with a clean growth environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive screen time
  • health problems
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • disrupted sleep patterns
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • reliance
  • impair
  • social skills
  • educational tools
  • digital literacy
  • mitigated
  • parental guidance
  • safeguards
  • responsible use
  • monitored
  • development
  • benefits
  • risks
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