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Government should spend funding on elementary school while other people say that it should be spent on high school. Discuss both perspective and give your opinion

Without any doubt, society is divided into two groups as per the distinct mindset of different
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 has become a debate able issue whether government provide
money
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 to primary
schools
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, or they should only spend on secondary
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 essay will not only shed light on both perceptions but
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 my point of view will be elaborated in the conclusion. On one side of the
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argument
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 there are
people
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 who argue that the benefits of giving
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 to elementary
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 considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The reason for believing is that
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 kids developed their brain skills in the early stage of their life, they grasp and obtain more knowledge during their childhood, so it is necessary for them to attend good primary
schools
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 which should have a great number of facilities like knowledgeable instructors which could help them to brush up their ability,
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, according to recent research conducted by national newspaper it is observed that children’s become more creative during their initial life, 80% of children between 5 to 8 years of age in Canada go to primary
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 and If the government do not provide the sufficient amount of funds
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 how would children’s build their foundation in the studies, which they only build it while going to primary
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, it is
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 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact authorities should give more focus on high
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 and provide funds to them only rather than wasting their economy on elementary
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People
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 often have
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 opinion because they think that parents of young individuals don’t send their kids to primary
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 quite often, they mostly nourish their young ones at home because they believe that sending children to primary
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 is just a waste of
money
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. They could teach them basics material at home, for ,instance a recent statistical data shows that 65% of
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 in Pakistan don’t send their child to elementary
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 as per their point of view they say that primary
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 fees are so high and they just cache
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 from the local peoples, they don’t teach and give more attention to children they simply explain those concepts which a young individual could learn at home easily from their parents, so it is better to send that a children’s should attend
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 when they have become more sensible,
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 there is no mean that government should provide funds to primary
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. As we have seen there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that administration should provide more amount of
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 to high
schools
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 because it would be better for their country’s economy.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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