You recently go to a concert and thought one of the singer was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter say how you feel about his performance, give details of your musical activities, explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities.

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Dear Rocky, I am writing to express my sincere thanks from my bottom of heart for your company during the

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funfilled concert event which was held in the ocean park area. It was like a mind-blowing performance. I can still feel that voice base and audience humming sounds during my deep sleep as well. I basically used to operate the keyboard only,

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, during our

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performance I was blessed to be at the drums as one of the drums experts could not able to turn up at our show. At the end of the show, we played the keyboard and drums together which made us feel proud along with your sweet voice. As we both have some good quality features and I am thinking that why do not we make a new album together? and I am sure that new songs will be delivered across the globe with my huge fan base which is additional support to us. please let me know what do you think ? any suggestions or recommendations are welcome. please do not hesitate to call me on my mobile number. I cannot wait to make a new album with your sweet voice..!! Best regards, Lakshmi.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

201 words

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