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Some people prefer activities and lifestyle in hot climates while others prefer activities and lifestyle in cold climate. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #activities #lifestyle #climates #climate
Some
people
 prefer
activities
 in
cold
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a cold
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place
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places
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. While some
people
 prefer in
hot
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a hot
the hot
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climate
. From my perspective, I agree with the latter view and think that exercise and
lifestyle
 in hot
tempture
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temperature
 bring benefits more than in cold
whether
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weather
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. In the following essay, the reasons to support my opinion will be discussed in detail. Some
people
 like hot
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weather
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whether
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weather
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 because
do
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exercise,
extrem
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extreme
 sports or
lifestyle
 in
hot
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a hot
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climate
 have more benefits.
First
 of all, When
people
 live in
hot
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a hot
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climate
 their blood pressure and heart rate pump up faster than
people
 who
activities
 in cold
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weather
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wether
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weather
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.
For example
, If you
workout
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work out
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 in hot
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weather
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whether
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weather
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, you will burn out more
calorie
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calories
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.
Finally
,
people
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who life
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life
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live
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 in hot
tempture
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temperature
have
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active
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an active
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 image. Some
activities
such
 as
clibing
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climbing
moutian
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mountain
mountains
 or surfing are famous
in
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among
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 university
student
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students
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 because it exciting and refreshing for youngblood.
However
, some
activitirs
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activities
 in hot
tempture
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temperature
 are
dagture
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nature
 for some
people
.it depen on individaul person. Some
people
 prefer
activities
 in
cold
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a cold
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climate
. They
beleive
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believe
 that
live
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living
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 in cold
tempture
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temperature
 healthier than
lifestyle
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a lifestyle
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 in
hot
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a hot
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climate
 and riskless
of
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cancer.
However
,
live
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living
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 in
clod
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a clod
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plase
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place
 in
long
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 term risk
to
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of
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depress
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. So, I prefer
activities
 in
hot
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a hot
the hot
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climate
. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 prefer
activities
 and
lifestyle
 in
cold
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a cold
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 place because it
feel
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feels
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slowlife
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slow life
lowlife
 and healthy. But I personally prefer
activities
 and
lifestyle
 in
hot
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a hot
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climate
 is
brtter
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better
.
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