The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

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Smoking is one of the most insecure factors
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harmful
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health. Despite
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many
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on
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bad habitude.
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essay will discuss two main causes of
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in society and the measures to prevent
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. The key aspect of increasing smoking is
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influence
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of stress in
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daily life.
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, nicotine is contained in cigarettes
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of
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organism. IN course of time, it became
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condition to
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the stress. Most
people
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who smoke think that smoking is the best way to deal with
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the depression
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they faced every day.
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,
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who work in big companies smoke during the day to reduce the nervousness of their busy schedule. Another key factor is an
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surrounding, which
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pressure
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young minds and
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to
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smoke to prove their coolness.
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, some
people
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consider that smoking can raise the status of a person
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peers.
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, there are promising solutions
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this
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problem.
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, the government should implement
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tax on cigarettes. If the authorities raise the price of cigarettes,
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people
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will start buying less of them.
Secondly
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, there should be an age limit for smokers.
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, if
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is established, the number of young smokers will decrease , because
people
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under the age of 18 cannot get it. Another way to improve the situation is to develop anti-smoking campaigns , which should make
people
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face the consequences of
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a bad experience. In conclusion, there are many factors that lead to the promotion of smoking, all
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that cause significant harm to health.
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, it
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have
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particular solutions for
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issue. I recommend
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the attention of the government to what a major problem is smoking
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