The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a number of ,years population from the countryside
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to
big
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metropolis for various reasons and ,
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a shortage of housing. In
this
case, the national government is the only one to tackle
this
issue. I
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fully
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that the
governer
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government
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has the main responsibility to have sufficient housing in commercial cities to prevent unnecessary side
effect
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. The main reason that causes the shortage of housing in downtown is increasing the population day by day who migrate from
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countryside to work as
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daily workers ,especially in
construction
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sectors
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and many industries. society
are
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moving to
center
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which
offer
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greater employment and a higher standard of living.
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, most of the city's life can access the internet , mobile banking, and
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transportation system.
As a result
, accommodation places are more and more demanding significantly for blue-collar workers who can only afford
a
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a low budget house
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low budget
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houses .
Additionally
, several side effects
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been occurred
such
as
water
shortage and electricity getting by hourly.
Moreover
, accommodation and domestic
water
supply cannot be separated in urban life. If the population and urban
water
system ratio are not equal, there will be many consequences related to people's health problems ,
for example
, people cannot use sufficient
water
amount for their
water
and sanitation purposes. Another particular problem of big city life is having good practices and
management
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system
of
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household waste. If the governments cannot control daily waste, the diseases of
diaherra
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diarrhoea
and flu can be spread easily. In
this
case, people have to spend extra charges for their health.
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the problem mentioned above, only the head of the nation can
be solved
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the problem because they have the
responsibilities
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to support
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a developed country and it requires a huge amount of money to build sufficient housing in the country’s gateway cities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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