Today's schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The public educational system in most

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European

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countries does not include subjects related to the economic and financial

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. More and more people, governments, teachers,

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students are now concerned about the lack of information about finance in

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represent a problem for students after leaving high school? Will they be able to be economically independent after leaving their home? Do the educational systems need to be improved to face

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situation? These are the main questions that are now discussed among the competent authorities. Some may argue that

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little information is given during the history lessons.

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seems not to be enough since it is considered from

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perspective and rarely includes contemporary economic models or information that can be used on a daily basis. Others can think that

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lack can be covered up by

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higher education, without taking into consideration that not every student will choose an

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go to university at all. For

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students the adequate instruments necessary to learn how to handle their money.

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is already done in some private

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in which there is the possibility to have Economy classes.

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in public

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, adding some extra hours per week for

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subject. Another crucial aspect is that they will be able to fully understand the economy of their country and vote wisely for new economic measures.

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Today's schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.

Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centres, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

2.Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, some countries are spending a lot of money to make it easier to use a bicycle. Why is this so? Is it the best solution to the transport problem?