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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue.

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Nowadays, public
health
are
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 paid much more attention by society. Some
people
 argue that nations have
responsibility
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 to implement rules of
health
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food
. The others claim that
people
 should not be deprived of freely choosing what they want to eat. In
this
 essay, I hold the latter and illustrate my reason.
People
 expect that they should decide their own
food
 they would eat because everyone has different preferences for
food
. Once their diets are decided by others, they couldn’t be satisfied.
For example
, for vegetarians, more meat intake may be much healthier for them.
However
, in fact, the way is opposite
with
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 their daily diets.
Therefore
, it is not a reasonable suggestion for them. On top of that, unhealthy
food
 like junk
food
 can bring energy to
people
 who feel exhausted. In most cases, high calories
food
 like hamburgers contains high protein and promotes
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 their minds. With regards to the reason why governments need to
strength
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food
 security, without restrictions, manufacturers which are profit-minded will abuse
food
 addictive to improve tastes and sell out of date
food
 for gaining revenue. It will have a negative effect
for
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 customers’ physical
health
.
Therefore
, governments should introduce strict laws to deter
these behaviour
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. At the same time,
the
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public
health
 is protected. In conclusion, whereas freely selecting
food
people
 eat can meet different preferences of
food
 and gain higher energy, implementing rules about
food
 can guarantee public
health
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burning of fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • trap heat
  • atmosphere
  • deforestation
  • carbon dioxide
  • greenhouse effect
  • industrial activities
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental regulations
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • lifestyle changes
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • LED bulbs
  • plant-based diet
  • raising awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • mitigate
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