Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue.

Nowadays, public
health
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
paid much more attention by society. Some
people
argue that nations have
responsibility
Add an article
a responsibility
the responsibility
show examples
to implement rules of
health
Replace the word
healthy
show examples
food
. The others claim that
people
should not be deprived of freely choosing what they want to eat. In
this
essay, I hold the latter and illustrate my reason.
People
expect that they should decide their own
food
they would eat because everyone has different preferences for
food
. Once their diets are decided by others, they couldn’t be satisfied.
For example
, for vegetarians, more meat intake may be much healthier for them.
However
, in fact, the way is opposite
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
their daily diets.
Therefore
, it is not a reasonable suggestion for them. On top of that, unhealthy
food
like junk
food
can bring energy to
people
who feel exhausted. In most cases, high calories
food
like hamburgers contains high protein and promotes
to refresh
Change the verb form
refreshing
show examples
their minds. With regards to the reason why governments need to
strength
Replace the word
strengthen
show examples
food
security, without restrictions, manufacturers which are profit-minded will abuse
food
addictive to improve tastes and sell out of date
food
for gaining revenue. It will have a negative effect
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
customers’ physical
health
.
Therefore
, governments should introduce strict laws to deter
these behaviour
Change the determiner
this behaviour
show examples
. At the same time,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
public
health
is protected. In conclusion, whereas freely selecting
food
people
eat can meet different preferences of
food
and gain higher energy, implementing rules about
food
can guarantee public
health
.
Submitted by youhua94 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • burning of fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • trap heat
  • atmosphere
  • deforestation
  • carbon dioxide
  • greenhouse effect
  • industrial activities
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental regulations
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • lifestyle changes
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • LED bulbs
  • plant-based diet
  • raising awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • mitigate
What to do next:
Look at other essays: