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All students should study art and music in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #study #art #music #school
IT IS OFTEN ARGUED THAT IT IS MORE ADVANTAGEOUS TO LEARN
ART
 AND
MUSIC
 STARTED AT
THE
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 YOUNG
AGES
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,EVEN IF IT IS UNINTERESTING TO YOU AT ALL. I COMPLETELY AGREE WITH
THIS
 OPINION AND THINK THAT WILL BE ABSOLUTELY USEFUL AND BENEFICIAL FOR STUDENTS WHO LEARNED
ART
 AND
MUSIC
 IN THE FUTURE.
FIRST
 OF ALL, I BELIEVE THAT
ART
 MAKES
PEOPLE
 RELAXED AND ABLE TO IMAGINE ALL THE THINGS THAT HAVE NO IN
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THE REAL
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REAL WORLD
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REAL-WORLD
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 OR IN THEIR IMAGINATION, THEY CAN DRAW AND PAINT WHATEVER THEY WANT .
ART
 ARE
ALSO
 ONE OF THE LANGUAGES THAT
PEOPLE
 USED
FOR
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COMMUNICATE
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 BEFORE USING A SIGN LANGUAGE IN
ANCIENT
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THE ANCIENT
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 PERIOD. ANCIENT
PEOPLE
 USED SOIL FOR ILLUSTRATED THE SITUATIONS, CULTURES, AND TRADITIONS THAT
WAS
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 HAPPENING AT THAT TIME ,RESULTING IN
PEOPLE
 IN NOWADAYS ABLE TO
KNOWS
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 WHAT
WAS
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HAPPENED IN TIME BEFORE THEIR BORN AND
LEARN
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LEARNING
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 FROM THE INFORMATION THEY OBTAINED AS
A
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FIGURES PAINTED ON THE WALL .
SECONDLY
,
MUSIC
 ARE
ALSO
 ONE OF THE
ART
 TO
MAKES
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PEOPLE
 SERENED AND BECOME
CLAM
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CALM
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 AFTER
DISCOVER
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DISCOVERING
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 THE
MUSIC
.MOST OF
PEOPLE
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 ENJOYED WITH THE
MUSIC
 OR USE
MUSIC
 TO ENTERTAIN AND COMMUNICATE. IN MY
OPINION
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PEOPLE
 WHO
KNOWS
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KNOW
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MUSIC
 ARE MORE ATTRACTIVE THAN
WHO
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THOSE WHO
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NOT
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 INTERESTED IN
MUSIC
.
THAT IS
 WHY IT IS MORE IMPORTANT TO FIND OUT BOTH
OR
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ONE OF
ART
 AND
MUSIC
 TO
MAKES
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 YOU HAPPY. TO CONCLUDE, I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT STUDENTS SHOULD STUDY
ART
 AND
MUSIC
 BECAUSE IT MAKES
PEOPLE
 HAPPY AND MOTIVATED.
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