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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter o explain why you would like the job o give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ o say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir and Madam, I am Vahid Ansari studying as a student in Australia. I have seen your advert in a magazine recently. I am writing to express my enthusiasm to take care and deal with your children
in
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 six months or more. I have not been able to have
holiday
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a holiday
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 and visit my family in the
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 two years due to intolerant educational conditions and poor financial situation.
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,
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 job can enhance my economic condition
that
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 results in visiting my immediate family. Since I have been studying
master
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a master
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 of mathematics in university, it can be helpful to your child, because he can be learned new methods for solving problems, given that I have had some similar experiences for five years. I am not sure whether you are aware of university conditions or not, but I must admit, I do not have much leisure time.
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 free time, I prefer to visit my best friends, which is often accompanied by watching football. In
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 I am a fanatic of Real Madrid. Yours sincerely, Vahid Ansari.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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