Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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contemporary world, the majority of governments believe that economic progress is
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significant factor rather than other developments.
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, some communities argue that they want to get equal importance
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other developments for a better tomorrow.
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view and I will give my opinion too.
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with, currently,
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economy is the backbone of the country . Wherever citizens are provided job opportunities by local authorities when there has
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economic progression.
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, as long
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monetary departments always strive to increase
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economy
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various productive factors especially, exporting products to international countries.
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, Srilanka has faced economic collapse due to political corruption and it caused
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in management fluctuations in goods and other products. As result, when we live in
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, we are able to face critical situations in our lifetime.
On the other hand
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, education, health and trades are the other sectors which want to develop in every nation.
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, education is
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vital key factor for
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and wherever we have a quality and standard education, we will become
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literacy society with a high proportion among other nations.
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, Australia decided to improve their healthcare system, by giving free healthcare services
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their
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citizens.
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, it demonstrates the standard and progress in their motherland and
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feasible
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a feasible
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environment
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their population. In conclusion, from my perspective, I believe that local authorities should want to implement plans and schemes to develop
economy
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the economy
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and other sectors in
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equal manner. Unless
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get necessary steps to rise up, we are definitely able to face
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issue
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because of their weaknesses in management skills.
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, undoubtedly, we will face economic and social collapse
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our communities.
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