Many teenagers believe becoming social media influencers is a good career choice. However, other insist that there are some major drawbacks related to an influencer career. Discuss both views.

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tech-savvy modern world, children have an immense opportunity to opt
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own advantages;
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, some people claim that
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have some consequences. In the following paragraphs, I will explore both
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views. Undoubtedly, social media influencer is a great career choice for
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provides flexibility in time, place, and platform. If they have internet access, they can post their content from anywhere that could be from home, from
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based on their passion.
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music as his passion and post many youtube videos and earn some pocket money. Many kids across the globe
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already influenced the people in almost all sectors like sports, animals, stocks, music and so on.
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there are many negative effects like it impacts education and
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they get access to adult content.
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early age impacts education, as they require
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time and energy in preparing and uploading the content.
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, as per the recent survey conducted by the Canada education department number of college dropouts is increased as they are
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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