Nowadays it is common for people to get married in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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statement is that I concur 100%. I am over thirty now. My observation and belief concerning marriage are enough as I have. Some people oppose

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vision, meanwhile, others fully support it. Anyway, I will bring some points up to you about why my pillar on

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point is that teenage married

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is uneasy to cope with all aspects of

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as financial needs, the majority concern, householding issues, the relationships between husband and wife, and how to deal with two families together. Young women usually cannot get along well with their in-laws while their husbands don’t have many abilities to analyse and resolve disputes very well. After that irreconcilable affair, both of them fail to keep the family built firmly in their long journey. If they have babies,

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will be more messed up with countless unsolving problems. As a consequence, some married couples abandon their children or leave them with their parents. Most teenagers are fully unmatured of brainpower and

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, their intellects are changeable, unpredictable, and thoughtless. It can lead to meet divorce without any consideration. Acquiring monetary support from their parents or someone else due to the unstable income is one of the underlying problems to meet quarrels among families because financial problems make small conflicts turn into big ones

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set their minds on fire and let them burn as emotional negative features.

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, they can’t put the fights out in time. In my point of view, late marriage is the best decision we have to take in order to get through our glorious days with our beloved ones on the smoothie paths we both make. Whether we are under the shelter of love and peace and we are surrounded

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around us will feel like everything in

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is perfect. That means

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial stability
personal growth
mature and stable relationships
rates of divorce
family conflicts
thoughtful and compatible matches
self-knowledge
healthier families
stronger community ties
declining birth rates
aging populations
workforce replenishment
economic sustainability
higher quality of life
financially and emotionally prepared

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Nowadays it is common for people to get married in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that competition at work, at school in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Instead of revealing the truth, the mass media very often misguides people. What are the reasons behind this and the visible effects on the society at large?