Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home , leisure and work activities To what extent do the benefits of Information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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information technology play

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role in everyone's life and in all

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. IT changes the way of living and at

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influence our home,leisure and work activities. I strongly believe that

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impact is higher than

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negative because

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it helps human life in many ways. On the one hand , with the help of IT we are secure our houses from the

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apart from

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our home application from the damage like air conditioner , refrigerator and more.

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IT the entertainment in our free time with help of different applications

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such

netflix

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, youtube.

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we can do hard tasks

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very easily like artificial intelligence

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time and very conveniently in large companies as

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example in Amazon company the number of robots are connected to the each other with help of cloud and gave information to each

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and do work in

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quick way and provide quality work

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provide the transparency to the customer.

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harm

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human lives in various ways due to information technology many application take our private data like e-mail id, bank passwords and our likes and dislikes and sell them to the other giant companies without our permission.

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people lost their jobs due to IT as

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example during

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-19 period many companies

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their own facilities like AI and fire their employees. To conclude, while, it

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human lives. Not only

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provides

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more facilities to

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various

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way

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,but

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it provides entertainment to us.

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believe that

advantages

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are outweigh

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the disadvantages.

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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home , leisure and work activities To what extent do the benefits of Information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?