Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home , leisure and work activities To what extent do the benefits of Information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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time
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information technology play
major
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role in everyone's life and in all
field
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. IT changes the way of living and at
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influence our home,leisure and work activities. I strongly believe that
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impact is higher than
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negative because
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it helps human life in many ways. On the one hand , with the help of IT we are secure our houses from the
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thief
apart from
this
it
prevent
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our home application from the damage like air conditioner , refrigerator and more.
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addition
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IT the entertainment in our free time with help of different applications
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such
as
netflix
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, youtube.
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with the help of
IT
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we can do hard tasks
in
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very easily like artificial intelligence
moreover
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time and very conveniently in large companies as
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example in Amazon company the number of robots are connected to the each other with help of cloud and gave information to each
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and do work in
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quick way and provide quality work
also
provide the transparency to the customer.
On the other
hand
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it
harm
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human lives in various ways due to information technology many application take our private data like e-mail id, bank passwords and our likes and dislikes and sell them to the other giant companies without our permission.
Beside
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this
people lost their jobs due to IT as
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example during
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-19 period many companies
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their own facilities like AI and fire their employees. To conclude, while, it
harm
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human lives. Not only
it
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provides
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more facilities to
human
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in
various
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way
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,but
also
it provides entertainment to us.
Therefore
i
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believe that
advantages
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the advantages
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are outweigh
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the disadvantages.
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