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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.Others believe that they should only be allowed to studey subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology. discuss boths these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,lots of
students
 are studying at different
universities
 and some
students
 are interested in different types of
subjects
 while other
students
 are focusing on limited
lessons
 because of some rules in their
universities
.
Therefore
, some
universities
 claim that teaching lots of
lessons
 is more efficient whereas other
universities
 assert that giving several
lessons
 which are relevant to science and technology is more sufficient for
students
.
This
 essay agrees that studying a variety of
subjects
 is more beneficial for
students
 who are university
students
.Both points of view will be discussed herewith.
Much
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high quality
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universities
such
 as Bilkent,METU or KOÇ
prefers
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 to teach different types of
lessons
 in order to enhance not only their academic success but
also
 their mental health.Both music and physic
subjects
 are being taught because of
this
 logical and valuable factor for
students
.
Also
,many surveys demonstrate that if
students
 learn many ranges of
lessons
 ,they can be more successful via exposing lots of different types of
lessons
.
However
,some educators agree that
students
 had better take limited
subjects
 that are related to technology and science so as to improve developments in the future.
Students
 who are studying medicine or biology have to follow technological developments day by day since new improvements can be useful
at
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 their departments.It is
therefore
 agreed that teachers pay attention to focusing only related to
subjects
 which are related to science and technology. To summarize,when all of
factors
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 are taken into account
this
 topic some still assert that
students
 should merely study their
subjects
 because they think that it can facilitate the discovery of technological developments
at
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 the future and
also
 these
students
 may be overcome their
lessons
 whatever they learn .
However
,I believe University
students
 ought to take a variety of
lessons
 because of both their mental health and their academic accomplishments.
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