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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.Others believe that they should only be allowed to studey subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology. discuss boths these views and give your opinion.

#people #university #students #study #studey #subjects #future #science #technology #boths
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Nowadays,lots of
students
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 are studying at different
universities
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 and some
students
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 are interested in different types of
subjects
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 while other
students
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 are focusing on limited
lessons
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 because of some rules in their
universities
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.
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, some
universities
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 claim that teaching lots of
lessons
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 is more efficient whereas other
universities
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 assert that giving several
lessons
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 which are relevant to science and technology is more sufficient for
students
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.
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 essay agrees that studying a variety of
subjects
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 is more beneficial for
students
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 who are university
students
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.Both points of view will be discussed herewith.
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universities
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 as Bilkent,METU or KOÇ
prefers
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 to teach different types of
lessons
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 in order to enhance not only their academic success but
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 their mental health.Both music and physic
subjects
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 are being taught because of
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 logical and valuable factor for
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.
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,many surveys demonstrate that if
students
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 learn many ranges of
lessons
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 ,they can be more successful via exposing lots of different types of
lessons
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.
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,some educators agree that
students
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 had better take limited
subjects
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 that are related to technology and science so as to improve developments in the future.
Students
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 who are studying medicine or biology have to follow technological developments day by day since new improvements can be useful
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 their departments.It is
therefore
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 agreed that teachers pay attention to focusing only related to
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 which are related to science and technology. To summarize,when all of
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 are taken into account
this
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 topic some still assert that
students
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 should merely study their
subjects
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 because they think that it can facilitate the discovery of technological developments
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 the future and
also
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 these
students
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 may be overcome their
lessons
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 whatever they learn .
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,I believe University
students
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 ought to take a variety of
lessons
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 because of both their mental health and their academic accomplishments.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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