Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

while the table presents how many people visited the
Ashdow
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Ashdown
museum
through
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in
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the
year
before and the
year
after it
renovated
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, the Pie charts depict the responses to
survey
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the survey
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of visitor satisfaction during the same two years. Overall, visitors and satisfaction both went up after the
renovation
. There were 74,000 people visiting the
Ashdow
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Ashdown
museum in the
year
before it was renewed, and
this
number climbed significantly to 92,000 in the
year
after the
renovation
. Moving on to visitor satisfaction, those who rated their experience as ‘dissatisfied’ made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the
year
before
museum
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was refurbished, at 40%.
However
,
this
number showed a dramatic decline to solely 15% after the refurbishment. The percentage of respondents who were very dissatisfied with their visit
also
fell, to only 5%. The proportion of those who responded ‘pleased’ and ‘very pleased’, in comparison, both went up in the
year
after the
renovation
to 40% and 35% respectively, and these were the most two common
response
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that
year
.
Finally
, those who didn’t give their feedback about the visit remained steadily in the tear before and the
year
after the
renovation
, at 5%.
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