Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities

There is a question of whether privet company owners have to make

sports

facilities

for citizens or not.

However

, I think it is better if

companies

develop their own schemes

instead

of doing tasks which they do not have a wide range of information about and there may end up with serious financial issues in the long term

firstly

, most of the privet

companies

in my mot know the exact location for building

this

sort of

sports

facilities

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facility

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. As in many parts of ,world governments are in charge of

this

kind of improvement.

As a result

companies

could mistakenly instal the

facilities

in the wrong part of the city and individuals can face difficulties because of

this

Thus

, everyone should do the job that they are familiar with

otherwise

not only they could not benefit society but

also

they may cause unfavourable results.

secondly

companies

are not able to spend

a massive amounts

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massive amounts

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of money on these

facilities

Therefore

, somehow they must provide

this

given away money for building new soort equipment. These costs can be recovered by raising the product prices made by that company or paying the employees monthly salaries without delay.

For instance

, the American company of Shumpet build an enormous

sports

area in Manhattan, but it bankrupt after a while. All in all, There is an

argurement

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argument

about

companies

which should they create

sports

facilities

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apply

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for

poblic

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public

or not and I strongly disagree with

this

notion and I believe

companies

do not have enough money and

khnowledge

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knowledge

to build

this

sort of

sport

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sports

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favilities

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facilities

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