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Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: -suggest someone who deserves the reward -mention what they have done to help the community -say what reward you would like to give this person

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Dear Sir / Madam , I read in
last
 week’s edition of the White Horse News that you are keen to reward local
people
 who have made significant contributions to the community . I would like to put my
mother
 , Mrs . Gillian Summerton , forward for
this
 reward . My
mother
 is a schoolteacher
,
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and has done much to enrich the lives of the young
people
 in her care . In her free time , she continues to give up her time to help
people
 . She runs a ladies’ choir which is a superb opportunity for local women to get together and enjoy themselves .
Moreover
 , the choir performs free of charge at charity events , and
consequently
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 my
mother
 has been fundamental in both raising large sums of money and bringing pleasure to
people
 . I know that my
mother
 does not need a financial reward for her services to the community , as it gives her a lot of pleasure .
However
 , I’m sure that she would appreciate formal recognition for her work , perhaps in the form of a donation to her preferred charity , the Red Cross . Thank you for your attention. Yours sincerely, Harry brown
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