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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and Dd To what extent do you agree?

#people #sites #facebook #impact #individuals
To a greater
extend
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 I think that
internet
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the internet
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 allows us to remain in touch with loved ones when we are far from them.
Firstly
 ,in
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the look
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look
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looking
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of
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for
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 greener
pastures
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,pastures
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 many
people
 are
traveling
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travelling
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in
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to
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 different countries , leaving their families behind so
internet
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the internet
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 allows them to feel close to their families.
Secondly
business
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businesses
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 are now using
internet
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the internet
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 more often through zoom
meeting's
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meetings
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,where 50
people
 or more can be in one meeting without congesting the room .It
also
help
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 in reducing the spread of covid 19.
In
addition
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people
 can
also
 work from home , advertising
they
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their
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 products there which
also
 reduces business rentals expense.
Furthermore
 learning for everyone has been made easy .
Also
 if you want to travel you can view the place you would like to visit before you make any payment.
However
 to a lesser extent the
internet
 can be hazardous to our children .They can interact with criminals pretending to be good
people
,
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 since you can only relay
with
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the information that the person you talking with gives you without knowing them personally.
Also
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people
 can be bullied there,
scammed
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and scammed
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 when making payments .
In
addition
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 family time will be consumed by it since everyone will be glued to their phones or laptops.
Therefore
 the
internet
 is a good way of communicating when used wisely .
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