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Band 2.5

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and Dd To what extent do you agree?

#people #sites #facebook #impact #individuals
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To a greater
extend
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 I think that
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internet
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the internet
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 allows us to remain in touch with loved ones when we are far from them.
Firstly
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 ,in
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the look
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look
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looking
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of
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for
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 greener
pastures
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,pastures
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 many
people
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 are
traveling
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travelling
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in
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to
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 different countries , leaving their families behind so
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internet
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the internet
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 allows them to feel close to their families.
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business
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businesses
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 are now using
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internet
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the internet
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 more often through zoom
meeting's
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meetings
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,where 50
people
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 or more can be in one meeting without congesting the room .It
also
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help
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helps
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 in reducing the spread of covid 19.
In
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addition
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people
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 can
also
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 work from home , advertising
they
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their
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 products there which
also
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 reduces business rentals expense.
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 learning for everyone has been made easy .
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 if you want to travel you can view the place you would like to visit before you make any payment.
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 to a lesser extent the
internet
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 can be hazardous to our children .They can interact with criminals pretending to be good
people
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,
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apply
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 since you can only relay
with
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apply
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the information that the person you talking with gives you without knowing them personally.
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Also
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people
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 can be bullied there,
scammed
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 when making payments .
In
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addition
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 family time will be consumed by it since everyone will be glued to their phones or laptops.
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 the
internet
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 is a good way of communicating when used wisely .
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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