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Although nowadays people are reading News through internet, newspaper still remains of value. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspaper #value
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These days,
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newspaper
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 provides a lot of
information
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 and everyone depends on
it
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 for getting any general
information
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. Some people think that reading
news
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 on social
media
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 or our mobile phone is
excellent
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 way to know about outsiders. But others considered
newspaper
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 is more convenient.
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media
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 provides
every
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apply
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information
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 easily,
price
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the price
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 of
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 cannot be discarded. I
am completely agree
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 with
this
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 position and discuss my point of view
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.
To begin
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 with, reading
newspaper
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from
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internet
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the internet
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 helps to save money as we do not need to spend
amount
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the amount
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 on buying a
newspaper
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.
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,
every
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all
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information
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 about the world is easily available on social
media
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. Along with it, it is convenient to
listen
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 the
news
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 by using
the
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apply
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social
media
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 or any app.
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, there are multiple apps
are
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accessible on
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internet
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the internet
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 and
plethora
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a plethora
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 of sites which are free of cost.
Secondly
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, there is no need to carry
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 all the
times
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time
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. People can read any update by using
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internet
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the internet
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.
Similarly
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, they can highlight and search for any difficult word on the spot as well as
they
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can save the vocabulary for later use.
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, many
ilets
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islets
pilots
 institutes or academies  give preference to
read
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reading
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news
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 online.
This
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 resulted in increasing band scores and
gather
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 a lot of
information
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.
On the other hand
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,
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 has
its
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their
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 own value. Individuals can read it easily and there are no eyesight
affects
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effects
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. As reading online
news
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 can have
negative
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a negative
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 effect on our eyes.
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, it is convenient for elders and they depend on it completely.
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,
old
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in old
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 age people cannot read
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news
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the news
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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 because of eye problems.
Then
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,
paper based
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paper-based
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 are useful. To sum up, while
paper based
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paper-based
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 are used by elders, reading
news
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 online has other advantages. I think that reading
news
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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 has more
advantage
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advantages
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 than its disadvantages.
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