Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

These days,
internet
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and different kind of
sites
are used widely among
people
. Many
people
believe that these apps have
adverse
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impact on both
person
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people
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and
community
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. These effects are increasing dramatically. I totally agree with
this
situation and will discuss my point of
views
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below. To start with, advancement in technology brings
plethora
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of comforts
in
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one's life. Many individuals use these networks negatively
such
as developing bad habits by totally depending on
internet
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the internet
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, plagiarism by
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copying
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others
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works
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as well as laziness.
Furthermore
, companies use many
sites
such
as Indeed or Zip recruiter by giving fake advertisements to sell their products.
In
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instance, there are many fake makeup
sites
which
includes
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saffora
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Safford
saffron
,
attract
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customers to sell their fake products.
Secondly
, social
sites
also
has
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a huge negative effect on society.
People
beomes
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becomes
become
jealous
about
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others by seeing their posts on
internet
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such
as on Instagram or telegram. Apart from that, some individuals start participating in gangs which causes
adverse
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an adverse
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impact
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impacts
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on children in the community.
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, youngsters
impacted
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are impacted
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a lot by seeing
the
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gang style
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videos on
internet
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the internet
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which can lead to disputes in
the
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society. To sum up, it is clear that the advancement in technology and
internet
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the internet
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has
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have
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a negative effect on
people
and society. I believe that
this
problem should
be combat
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as soon as well,
otherwise
it will become more adverse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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