Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

The world has become more mobilized and advanced with
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support
of
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technology. Many
people
recently prefer to stay at
home
and work remotely and so do the students, interacting with their teachers and classmates through computers or smartphones. I, personally, think that
this
is
a
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significant progress that technology
bring
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to
humanbeing
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human being
human beings
due to the fact that
people
are approaching it easily and more economically
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following
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reasons.
Firstly
, nowadays the progression of technology can push employment and study go beyond the limit of distance. Because
people
can work from
home
or anywhere,
so
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companies can
recruite
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recruit
people
from all over
world
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as long as they meet their
requirement
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.
This
means they
have
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have
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more
chance
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to select more candidates and in the same way,
people
are getting
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chance to choose where to work but still stay with their family. Students
also
can choose to learn at
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that is
suitable to them without worrying too much about
traveling
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too far.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
this
way can reduce a wide range of risks due to
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. Working and studying from
home
can help
people
save
their
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time and provide
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financial support to them and especially the companies. It is quite obvious that many
people
will save hours every day if they do not need to commute from
home
to their workplace and vice versa.
Besides
, companies are likely not to necessarily spend money on renting and paying water and electricity bills every month,
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which can be a huge amount. It can be argued that working and studying remotely may decrease
people
's social interaction, and face-to-face interaction is good
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some respects.
Nevertheless
, it is hard to deny the benefits of
this
development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • work-life balance
  • environmental impact
  • socio-economic background
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • productivity
  • reliable technology
  • quality of education
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • commuting
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