In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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The two maps
given
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present what changes have been done to the town of Kimsville around the
city
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center
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since 2002. In 2002,
trees
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were planted around the
city
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centre in four corners, but afterwards, the
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on the left side are removed. To be more specific, new apartments and
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stadium are now in the place of the north-west and south-west corners of
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city
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centre respectively, exactly where the
trees
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in 2002.
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, there have been three more new constructions. A new train station and software company are
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built
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the very west and east sides of
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city
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separately
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today, and the old cinema in the south has been replaced by a pub. The only unchanged thing
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the right-side
trees
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is the shopping centre in the direct north of
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city
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  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • work ethic
  • resilience
  • self-confidence
  • self-worth
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • frustration
  • self-esteem
  • pressure
  • anxiety
  • individual effort
  • collaboration
  • social support
  • systemic factors
  • talent
  • opportunity
  • luck
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