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In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

#cultures #childrens #children #message
The two maps
given
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gave
have given
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 present what changes have been done to the town of Kimsville around the
city
center
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centre
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 since 2002. In 2002,
trees
 were planted around the
city
 centre in four corners, but afterwards, the
trees
 on the left side are removed. To be more specific, new apartments and
football
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a football
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 stadium are now in the place of the north-west and south-west corners of
city
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the city
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 centre respectively, exactly where the
trees
 were originally
at
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apply
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in 2002.
In addition
 to
this
, there have been three more new constructions. A new train station and software company are
also
 built
at
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on
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 the very west and east sides of
city
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the city
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 separately
at
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apply
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today, and the old cinema in the south has been replaced by a pub. The only unchanged thing
beside
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besides
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 the right-side
trees
 is the shopping centre in the direct north of
city
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the city
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.
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