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Some believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the rapid spread of digital
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 across much of the world over the past two decades, whether
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 would narrow or widen the wealth gap has been a topic of widespread debate. There are strong arguments on both sides, and I shall address these presently.
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 the one hand, supporters of
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 narrowing the gap
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 to the opportunities that digital
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 bring to people living in developing countries. They argue that digital
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 have provided opportunities that were out of reach to the poor and the disadvantaged in the past. They emphasise that now millions of entrepreneurs in developing countries
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 as China use e-commerce to sell goods, many of whom are from poor families. They
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 claim that
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 overcomes some major barriers faced by people with disabilities in their learning activities, many of whom live in impoverished African countries
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 as Kenya. Those who believe the gap is widened by
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,
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, argue that the effect of
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 on wealth disparity is far less than expected.
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, they point out the fact that a substantial portion of the world’s population still lacks access to the Internet and is excluded from the digital economy in reality.
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, it is often said that artificial intelligence and robotics are rapidly changing the labour markets.
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 might lead to significant middle-skill jobs being replaced by automation in poor nations. Both of these factors are causing the disparity between the rich and the poor to widen rather than narrow. In conclusion, I am more convinced that the rich-poor discrepancy can be narrowed by digital
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 in light of the opportunities they bring to the poor. So connecting the unconnected to
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 is of paramount importance in making the world more equal.
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