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Some people think that government funding for schools should be spent on science subjects rather than on other subjects. To what Extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #schools #science #subjects
admittedly, it is true that students need to work harder compared to the past generation,
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 a growing population and fierce competition in
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 counterproductive effect. Some people are suffering from psychological diseases,
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 as depressive disorder. Some even have suicide tendencies, which might lead to irreparable consequences. According to the statistics of the Education Bureau of Anhui Province, one to two university students commit suicide on the daily basis in Anhui Province alone, many of these tragedies are under high pressure from studies or dissertations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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