Every year, thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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In recent years, we have seen a considerable rise in the number of

students

going overseas to study. In spite of the fact that studying abroad brings many benefits, getting

drawbacks

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are

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undeniable.

However

, I believe the benefits outweigh the

drawbacks

. On the one hand, there are many reasons why studying abroad should be encouraged. First of all, for a good long-term investment, getting a foreign qualification would provide ample opportunities to find a well-paid

job

, resulting in higher income and enhancing our personal value.

For example

according to

the statistics of

job

search websites in Vietnam,

almost

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most

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job

positions with competitive salaries refer to people who have had overseas experiences.

Moreover

, studying abroad would bring

students

close to foreign cultures,

new

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and new

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languages and meet lots of people in the world which give

students

a wider knowledge to apply in their future

job

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jobs

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On the other hand

, going overseas to study

bear

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bears

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many problems physical

as well as

mental for

students

Firstly

, physical health, the changing weather in a new

live

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apply

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place could

be affected

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affect

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the physical well-being of

students

. For

instants

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instance

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, moving from the tropics to the temperate zone causes the possibility of catching a cold for a long time.

Secondly

, mental health,

getting

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homesickness, language problems and the lack of friends at the beginning of time living in a foreign country cause mental inhibition. These reasons, lead to an increase in the number of suicidal

students

abroad. In conclusion,

although

it is true that studying abroad still has some

drawbacks

however

, in my opinion, there are many good benefits which outweigh the

drawbacks

encourage

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students

should study in foreign countries.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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for instance
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to give a clear example
such as
namely
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Every year, thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Public library should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, applications, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

International community should act immediately to encourage countries to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels, such as oil and gas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people and get new events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?