Every year, thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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In recent years, we have seen a considerable rise in the number of
students
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going overseas to study. In spite of the fact that studying abroad brings many benefits, getting
drawbacks
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undeniable.
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, I believe the benefits outweigh the
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. On the one hand, there are many reasons why studying abroad should be encouraged. First of all, for a good long-term investment, getting a foreign qualification would provide ample opportunities to find a well-paid
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, resulting in higher income and enhancing our personal value.
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,
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the statistics of
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job
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positions with competitive salaries refer to people who have had overseas experiences.
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, studying abroad would bring
students
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close to foreign cultures,
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and new
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languages and meet lots of people in the world which give
students
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a wider knowledge to apply in their future
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job
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, going overseas to study
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many problems physical
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mental for
students
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.
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, physical health, the changing weather in a new
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place could
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the physical well-being of
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. For
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, moving from the tropics to the temperate zone causes the possibility of catching a cold for a long time.
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, mental health,
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homesickness, language problems and the lack of friends at the beginning of time living in a foreign country cause mental inhibition. These reasons, lead to an increase in the number of suicidal
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abroad. In conclusion,
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it is true that studying abroad still has some
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,
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, in my opinion, there are many good benefits which outweigh the
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students
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should study in foreign countries.
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