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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in countryside. More people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What your opinion about this?

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These days, in many countries, amount of
people
 is increasing, so
government
 should be building new apartments for them. Some
people
 including me believe that it is essential to build houses in
suburbs
 cause of a welfare society, decreasing pollution and crowded. The main reason, that
government
 should be building new houses for adults is for welfare social. If there is not enough house for
people
, they have to live in pensions or shelters in the city where there are different disease in it and some
people
 always are patient.
besides
, we have many
people
 who are not happy and do not have a good mood, so it has an influence on our community.
In addition
, another main reason related to crowded cities. When there is no countryside where the public could be living there, the number of
people
 in
town
 is increasing.
Also
, many of them go to work every day and we have a rush time in during the day,
hence
 our transportations always are crowded. After a ,while many
people
 use to own car which is the cause of pollution and they hurt to our environment.
However
, many
people
 live in
suburbs
 because of living costs in
town
 or good weather but many of them have journey during the day to
town
 for several reasons.
In addition
 to
this
, there are more community services in cities better than in
suburbs
.
Government
 should pay attention to countryside
people
's essential needs. In conclusion, there are many reasons that
government
 should be building new houses for
people
 in
suburbs
.
For example
, decreasing pollution and crowded beside increasing welfare social.
Moreover
, they have to pay attention to
people
's essential needs and well community services in the countryside like those who live in
town
.
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