Some people think that all university students sould study whatever they like. Others believe that they shoyld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Opinions from the community stated that all collegians should learn whatever they prefer,
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there are others who disagree and say students should rather focus on majors that
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important for the coming times. While I agree with the
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some good
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being said for the latter, which will be
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focusing on topics that will be useful in the
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putting them in a position that will fit
future
needs. Jobs in the
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will be changing and it is important for university students to be able to adapt to them. Learning important
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such
as coding, information technology, vaccination research, etc shall lead to a more secure career because of the job opportunities that will come along.
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, forcing someone to learn a certain subject they might not like will probably lead to them quitting. There are
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those in the medical field. A lot of residents quit because of the amount of stress and pressure they receive doing a job they are not passionate
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. No one should be forced to do something they do not love especially if it is for money or to fit in the
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. In conclusion, sure it is good for
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university
students to be ready for the
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. But their passion should never be disregarded, forcing oneself
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something they do not like or even despise will always lead to a bad result. So as I see it university attendees should be allowed to focus on whatever subject they love the most.
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