Companies should provide sports facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

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are getting involved in

community

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work as a channel to return to the

community

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which entails that they not only focus on

profit making

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but

also

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supporting

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the welfare of the

community

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Corporation

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should engage in

sport

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facilities in the village.I fully agree that

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the organisation

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organisation

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organisations

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will benefit from

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involvement of sports in the

community

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and

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community

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the community

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will have more impact from

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this

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developments.

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the institution

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institution

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will get

huge

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impact

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that they will not need to advertise

for

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apply

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their product as they will use

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activities to create awareness of the services they offer.

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,society

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confidence

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the institution for having excellent and beneficial engagement with the

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research done by Mt Kenya University shows that 90% of industries that support

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work have

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high

turn over

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comparing

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to those which do not participate.

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,it is prudent that,institutions should engage immediate neighbourhood for good exposure and support for the sake of future

endeavour

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,it is an opportunity to

interract

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interact

with others as it

facilitate

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to know neighbours and

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help

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to boost mental health and physical fitness.

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,there is an

opportinity

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opportunity

to showcase and discover talent

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that the institution can support financially to a higher level while others discover their capability.

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research done by the University of Nairobi

indicate

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that 70

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% of talents are discovered during

community

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sport

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activities. To conclude,it is fundamental for

enterprise

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enterprises

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to participate in

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activities of sporting as it is beneficial to both the venture and the

community

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Sabina Hamisi

May 25, 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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