Companies should provide sports facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

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The establishment
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are getting involved in
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work as a channel to return to the
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which entails that they not only focus on
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supporting
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the welfare of the
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The corporation
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Corporation
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should engage in
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facilities in the village.I fully agree that
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the organisation
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organisation
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will benefit from
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involvement of sports in the
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and
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community
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will have more impact from
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developments.
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the institution
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institution
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institutions
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will get
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impact
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that they will not need to advertise
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their product as they will use
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activities to create awareness of the services they offer.
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the institution for having excellent and beneficial engagement with the
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research done by Mt Kenya University shows that 90% of industries that support
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to those which do not participate.
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,it is prudent that,institutions should engage immediate neighbourhood for good exposure and support for the sake of future
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,it is an opportunity to
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to know neighbours and
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to boost mental health and physical fitness.
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,there is an
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that the institution can support financially to a higher level while others discover their capability.
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research done by the University of Nairobi
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70
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% of talents are discovered during
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sport
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activities. To conclude,it is fundamental for
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enterprises
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to participate in
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activities of sporting as it is beneficial to both the venture and the
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