In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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industries
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to more to the spatial pleases which is from people life .
Although
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issue
can have many
advantages
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is that big
cities
will be without air pollution If the factories move spacial areas and
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outside
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cities
.These
businesses
and
industries
produce too much smoke so If these factories
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outside of
cities
,
this
smoke will not enter the
cities
.The reason is that air pollution is one of
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problems in modern big societies .The governments can solve
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this
way. The
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is that traffic jams can be less than before with
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decision
.The reason is that
factories
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vehicles will have
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way
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commuting so people can save time when there is no traffic jam .
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result
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this
method can have a lot of benefits for
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government
governments
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such
as saving money.
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spacial arias which have many facilities need
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much cost for
businesses
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industries
.They have to pay too much money for
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their business. Another negative point is that
businesses
will be too
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far from big
cities
so they have to spend
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time
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transforming.
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they need to have more vehicles and staff. To sum up,there can be a lot of
advantages
in moving
businesses
and
industries
in spacial arises which is far from big
cities
.
For example
:
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method will affect on decline traffic jam and big
cities
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belie sky without air pollution .while it has many disadvantages
such
as spending much time for transferring and having more vehicles and
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staff
.
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