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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Engineering sciences are striving hard to make
such
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 appliances that provide comfort to the world's population but for functioning these equipment external energy is required to operate which solely either comes from crude
oil
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 or from other sources of
power
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 generating resources.
Currently
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 in our surroundings petroleum
oil
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 is the monumental source of get-up-and-go;
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, The public is encouraging
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 consume renewable means of
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. I think sustainable ways have more positive impacts than natural gas, In
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 essay, I will highlight the reasons behind
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 along with examples and draw a lucid conclusion,
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.
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 with, The very
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 factor is that petroleum fuels are producing greenhouse gases. Fossil fuels contain many carbons and carbon produces unburnt carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide which absorbed sunlight.
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, It increases the earth's temperature and hit hard our climate. To illustrate, In the
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 two ,decades world's heating scale is hiking by 40% due to much consumption of organic fuels.
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, Natural ways of
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 are cheaper because it does not need much capital to produce. Viable energy equipment is easy to install and their maintenance cost is lower and
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 less workforce is required.
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, they are charging less compared to other resources which need extra effort.
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, In my ,country domestic electricity bills are less compared to our neighbour nations since they are mostly hydroelectricity. To sum up, Solar
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 has many plus points over
oil
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 energy because
oil
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 base
power
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 makes huge poisonous gases and renewable sources have reasonable prices. Given
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 situation, It seems that authorities need to focus on inexhaustible manners of
power
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 because it makes less contaminated gases and is environmentally friendly.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • alternative energy sources
  • wind energy
  • solar energy
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • environmental benefits
  • reduction of greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy
  • energy independence
  • energy security
  • cost challenges
  • infrastructure challenges
  • reliability issues
  • intermittency issues
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