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Nowadays more people have consumer goods like refrigerator and washing machines..Do u think this is a positive or negative development.

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Technology has made a major impact on human's
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 life, as a
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result manual jobs are replaced by
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. Many newly invented consumer goods like the washing
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 and refrigerators are common in all houses, it certainly benefits people, but at the same
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, there are some demerits
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 calculated. The following paragraphs point out the merits and demerits of having
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 and foremost, having some electric tools like a refrigerator, and micro-oven, help to avoid physical training and save
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, in the old,days Indian women have to wash their clothes by hand ,
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 activity needs more
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 and energy, but after the washing machine replaced
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 job, it was a great relaxation for ladies. Grinding tool is another example of the goods that are commonly used in kitchens. Refrigerator has the capacity to store foods for a certain period of the era, so
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, can prepare a meal for 4 or 5 days, that's how we can save our hour and use that space for some other purpose.
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, when society started to depend more on
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 electrical equipment, they lost a healthy lifestyle and increased the number of hospital admissions.
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 , people consuming frozen food items more frequently causes plenty of gastrointestinal diseases and they have to end up in hospital. At the same
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, some instruments like grinding
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 and washing
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, make society lazy and as they do not need to put much effort to finish their work, the physical activity is compromised ,so we have to find out another
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 for exercise. To conclude , even though, many new consumer goods are inevitable nowadays, there are some complications hiding behind them if we do not use them carefully.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • consumer goods
  • efficiency
  • health and hygiene
  • foodborne illnesses
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainability
  • economic growth
  • consumerism
  • cultural practices
  • communal
  • dependence on technology
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