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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Due to meet the growing need for
food
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 to support an increasing population, Fascinating that some countries have
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a culture
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culture
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 to
make
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 use of edible
insects
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 as a
food
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 source.
However
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, some
people
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 believe that
insects
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 are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will
also
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 negatively affect nature. In the following paragraph, I will explain
benefits
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 outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of eating
insects
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 Eating
insects
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 can save our world from
starvations
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starvation
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.
Insects
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 can be a good source of
food
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 to feed
people
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 around the world. In many parts of the world , we see
people
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 starving and
die
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dying
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 because of the lack of
food
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 resources.
Insects
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 can be a solution to help
people
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 to survive in the middle and east of Africa. The increasing population around the globe will make it more difficult for the poor to find
food
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.
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, some
insects
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 approve from scientific research that
its
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they
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 contain a lot of protein
nutrient
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nutrients
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.
Howevers
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However
, There are a lot of mistake
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 from
news
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the news
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 affect
people
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feel
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to feel
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 unreliable as same as
mass
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the mass
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 hysteria effect. Rich
peoples
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people
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 maybe look down on
people
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 who eat
insects
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 in rural areas. To solve the problems I think that scientific experiments can reduce the negative effects that can
endager
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endanger
 nature by harvesting
insecting
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inspecting
insects
. Reproducing, healthy
insects
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in
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on
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 farms will help to keep the natural balance. Improving
Food
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 products that are based upon
insects
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 can change the negative point of view toward eating
insects
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.
Artifical
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Artificial
 taste and attractive flavour can attract
people
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 to eat these products.
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