many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people however that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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progress
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is quite
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important
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life.
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reported the ranking of many categories of
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including economy, education and
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. A lot of governments consider that economic growth is
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most
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important
objective for them. Still, others argue that
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other
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types of
progress
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are important for a nation. In
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will be discussed and we consider which one is more
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important
.  Economic
progress
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is
most
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intergral
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integral
part
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a country since they can spend money on
imporving
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improving
society.
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, Japan
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not rich after
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world war 2,
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they had not enough schools and hospital for citizens
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tolacking
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to lacking
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of money.
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, after making huge economic
progress
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with
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the period of
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war, Japan could
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in
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improving
their
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income,
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moreover
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people could consume and live
richely
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richly
.
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, it makes clear that the
development
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economically is most
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important
for many
govenments
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governments
.
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, others believe that other
tyepes
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types
of
improvment
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improvement
are equally crucial for a country. The other types of
progress
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including
health
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conditions and education
sistems
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systems
can increase
citizen's
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satisfaction
for
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their life.
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, South
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tried to increase the number of hospitals and schools with some NGOs in 1980 which lead to a great result that people feel live more safely with good
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condiation
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condition
conditions
and
knowleadge
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knowledge
.
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it is
apperant
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apparent
that trying to make
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improvent
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improvement
for other types of
progress
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is important as well as economic growth. Both
of
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economic
progress
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and the
development
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of other parts like
health
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,
education
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and education
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have a large
infuluence
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influence
on citizens.
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, the economic growth
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to make a benefit
for
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only
limited
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people
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,
therefore
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I believe that the other parts are equally important since all
of
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citizens
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the citizens
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can get
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their
there
benefits. After thorough
this
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discussion, it is predicted that if a government focus on not only the economic
development
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,
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but
also
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social
improvments
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improvements
, the nation will be changed in
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way dramatically.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • technological innovation
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