Only rich people should donate to charity. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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The world’s wealth can never be evenly distributed so while there are those suffering from
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others who live in abundance.
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, some hold the notion that only the well-off should be accountable for doing philanthropic work. In my perspective, for solely the affluent to donate is nonsensical. In
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I will elaborate on my opinion as to why
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is an unagreeable statement. To commence with, there are numerous ways to do charitable work and
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the quantity that the well-heeled can offer may have a greater magnitude,
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. Anyone should be able to donate regardless of their financial situation since can there ever be enough help around?
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people giving and helping the situation would ameliorate better than just the monetary
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, the affluent can provide money to aid the impoverished but can not give
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suitable clothes and utilities like normal
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without limiting it to the wealthy result in a greater number of people
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means the things that could be given away
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of becoming waste could be utilized more. The amount of unnecessarily discarded objects would increase if not given away, which would create an extra problem diverting attention from already existing ones
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as helping the less fortunate lives. It is inevitable that not everyone in adversity can be helped so why restrict the possible
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when there are a plethora of things that could be given away
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of becoming waste. In conclusion, not only the affluent but anyone who can
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offer
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. The total accumulated from merely the wealthy would always be less than if everyone with the ability to could, there
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stuff that the intermediate in society can provide that are appropriate and could be useful
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of creating
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aggravated pollution issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • philanthropy
  • broader spectrum
  • mutual aid
  • affluent
  • foundations
  • oversimplifies
  • multifaceted
  • socioeconomic
  • inclusive
  • democratizing donations
  • online fundraising platforms
  • social media campaigns
  • micro-donations
  • driving social change
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