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What skills do you need to be independent? Support your answer with relevant evidence and examples.

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Independence
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 is a vital aspect that every individual should attain before reaching
their
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adulthood. I firmly believe that not only soft
skills
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, but interpersonal
skills
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 would
also
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 contribute to the progress of
people
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 becoming more and more independent. Soft
skills
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 have always played a pivotal role in
people
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’s way of becoming independent, especially in
people
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’s
lifestyle
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.
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 and foremost,
time
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 management
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skill
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skills
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 would enable
individuals
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 to become more self-disciplined and self-reliant in both
work
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 and lifestyle. With the ability to take full control of their
time
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,
people
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 would be able to boost their
work
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 efficiency
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 but still can maintain their health condition by leaving
time
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 for sufficient rest after working.
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 is particularly useful for those who are too burdened with
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 heavy workload. Another soft
skill
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 that would facilitate
people
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 in their way of achieving
independence
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 is money management
skill
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. Learning to use the available budget wisely in some particular circumstances,
such
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 as cooking, shopping,..., allows
individuals
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 to attain balance in life. To be more specific, some undergraduates living apart from their
parents
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 usually pay for luxurious meals and items when they have sufficient money, ignoring the fact that they might have to live poorly
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, which is extremely detrimental
for
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 their health. If the attainment of many soft
skills
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 enables
individuals
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 to maintain a healthy lifestyle independently, interpersonal
skills
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 would contribute to their
independence
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 in
work
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.
To begin
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 with, team working
skill
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 is a
favorable
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 facilitator of being independent at
work
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.
Acquiring
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 the ability
of discussing
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 and working harmoniously with peers,
people
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 are enabled to not only foster
the
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work
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 productivity
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 but
also
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 shape a habit of always considering and being receptive to other
people
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’s opinions, which would
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 enrich their knowledge for future projects.
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,
individuals
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also
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 need problem-solving and decision-making
skills
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 throughout their lifetime, especially at
work
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. If
parents
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 usually make
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a decision
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decision
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 and tackle the problem for their children on the grounds of the young’s lack of fundamental knowledge and experience in life,
people
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 have to learn to finish these tasks on their own in order to live independently. Being too reliant on
parents
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also
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 means that they might have to suffer from a hard
time
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 puzzling and not knowing how to solve the issues wisely in the absence of
parents
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, preventing them from achieving job promotion later on. In conclusion, both soft
skills
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 and interpersonal
skills
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 are required for every individual to attain
independence
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 in life.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

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