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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Nowadays, many
children
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 are facing a lot of
pressure
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 in their life,
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 as academic issues, social problems, and so on. There are several causes why
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pressure
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 exists, and there are some solutions for
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 problem. There are many reasons why the
pressure
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 appears.
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, rising standards of academics make kids have to learn more to compete for rankings.
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,
students
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 in oriental countries like South Korea, China, and Japan study an average of eighteen hours per day to be able to get high grades in school. Achieving good results could help youngsters have more opportunities to work in a better environment.
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, families have too
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 expectations
for
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 their
children
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.
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 makes
children
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 feel more tired when going out in society and
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 at home has the same
pressure
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.
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,
children
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 would not share their
pressure
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for
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 anyone and they would take the hardship on
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their self
theirself
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themselves
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. To solve
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 problem, several solutions have been proposed.
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, the government should review and revise the learning system in schools. Reducing the burden of studying helps
students
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 have more time to rest after stressful school hours.
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, society should set up support groups and counselling for all
students
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 to help them
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 their problems,
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 as mental health,
pressure
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 from family, and so on.
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,
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 could help
students
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 solve burdens easier and reduce anxiety in daily life to focus on other work. In conclusion, the pressures which
students
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 are facing is a difficult problem and the government should come up with solutions to overcome
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 situation.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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