In many countries fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantage of this outweigh the advantage

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fast-paced world, it is becoming increasingly challenging for the folks to take out time for themselves
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, they tend to cook less at home and consume unhealthy meals frequently. The increasing demand for junk
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or fast
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is becoming fashionable nowadays in most
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countries
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due to its convenience and
low cost
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price. From my perspective,
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of street
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is going to be a bane rather than a boon. In
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the discussion
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is not only about the benefits but
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the drawbacks of these types of fast
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along with some references, To commence with, with
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of industrialization the competition has increased to
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that employees are busy upgrading themselves to reserve their jobs.
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scenarios have left them with very little time for their personal space. Fast
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outlets. are advantageous in terms of offering
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options. Convenience,
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is Indispensable factors of fast
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due to the fact that
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cuisine is compatible with people who live on a tight budget and a tight schedule. Processed
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is suitable for most of all ages
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, fast
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or junk
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is unhealthy
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and undebatably Consuming too much unhealthy
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could lead to unforeseen consequences. The adverse effects can be seen in health.
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processed
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is high in calories and low in nutrition. Increasing numbers of people who contract obesity, diabetes and heart diseases are
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because of
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bad habit of consuming fast
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of processed
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are more significant than the possible benefits. I strongly believe that
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of looking at the short-term benefits of consuming junk
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, one should think from a health point of view and must attain a broader perspective.
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