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Nowadays some people have anti-social behavior and lack respect to others. What are the reasons? What are the solutions?

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Nowadays, it seems that an increasing number of
people
, both children and adults, exhibit certain anti-social
behaviour
 and a degree of lacking respect in response to
others
.
This
 essay will analyze the main causes of the issue and offer some possible solutions to reverse the trend. Factors that contribute to a particular child's or adolescent’s anti-social
behaviour
 may vary, but they usually include certain forms of family problems (e.g. lack of parental care) or difficulties encountered at school (e.g. school bullying).
Besides
, young
people
 today are easily influenced by
the
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poor
behaviour
 and violent images in the media or on the Internet, so certain proper guidance should be offered by parents and teachers to alleviate the undesirable consequences. In order to achieve
this
 end, parents should help their children to know what is important in
life
, what role they will play in their world, and how they are expected to behave. Teachers should teach students how to cooperate with
others
 and how to contribute to the
life
 of their community. Causes leading to lacking respect
to
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others
 and anti-social
behaviour
 among adults are much more complicated, but one principal reason, I believe, is the lack of
life
 chances. By that I mean,
many
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people
, especially those from economically disadvantaged families, tend to have very limited resources of education and access to employment;
therefore
, some of them can barely make ends meet, and
others
 have difficulty surviving.In
this
 case,
people
 are easily developing conduct disorders or even
commit
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 crimes. To improve the situation, the government should try harder to enhance the social welfare system so as to guarantee a higher
life
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 standard for its
people
 and work out some solutions or build up a system to help those misguided
people
 get back on the right track. To conclude, actions that harm or lack consideration for the well-being of
others
 could easily jeopardize the development of
people
 themselves and society as a whole;
thus
, the issue addressed in the essay should be given enough attention.
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