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Interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world. In your opinion, should school be compulsory for all children, or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays, There are various types of education systems. Some people are interested in homeschooling that becoming more widespread around the world. In the following paragraph, I will explain a cause that some families be allowed the right to choose to educate their
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 at home.
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, I think that
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 have different learning development due to different
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. Some
children
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 face a lot of problems when going to
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.
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, They separated from friends because of bullying in
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 and the teachers do not control every
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 in class. They are unhappy to learn at
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. On the ground,
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 is a reliable person in
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's minds. Some parents, who can manage time from work, can as the role of teachers by homeschooling.
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, I may support the opinion that some schools are not safe for a
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. In the
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 two years, In my country reported
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 in pre-primary
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school
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 dramatically punished a
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. It very severe problem that a
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 only
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-year-olds was unsafe in
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.
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, In the secondary
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 in Thailand, There is a lot of use of mental and physical force in
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 by teachers because some students break
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 rules
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 as not wearing a
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 uniform followed by the
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 act. It can illustrate that we have no freedom to choose suitable clothes by ourselves.
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, The nonsense rules unsupport creative thinking for
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. So, I surely learning at home will make efficient to improve my creative and social skills than at
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. In conclusion, I think it depends on an individual
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's
behavior
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that is
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 or homeschooling. I think government sectors should open the freedom to choose a suitable format to learn.

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