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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when traveling, etc.).

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Nowadays, technology gives us the possibility to
work
 wherever we want.
This
 reality could provoke some advantages and disadvantages.
First
 of all, I would like to highlight the role of the evolution of technology. The number of opportunities that it has created is significant.
However
, in
this
 growth, we can find some negative points. The main disadvantage of teleworking is that you always
work
 because it is complicated to know how to distribute your
time
. It would help if you learned to separate the workplace and your home and stop working in your free
time
.
For example
, in my experience, I often don't know when to stop working. Sometimes I travel by bus and spend
this
time
 working with my mobile phone
instead
 of listening to music or relaxing. In my case, it isn't easy to measure my working
time
. Doing your
labor
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 is hard with a poor feeling for your co-workers. In
this
 situation, while you are working at home, you are enjoying and doing your job right. On the other side, working out of the office is an excellent solution if you don't have a decent professional atmosphere. Another advantage is you decide where you want to do your task. You can choose to
work
 on the beach or in another country. In conclusion, there are more advantages than disadvantages because if you can organize an excellent timetable, you will enjoy your
work
 and free
time
. You must be not dependent on
work
 and know "how to
work
 to live and not to live to
work
."
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