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The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job. Do you agree or disagree?

#job #money
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People
 have their own ambition
while
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when
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 they graduate. The most important goal for them is they want to get
high
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a high
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salary
 once they graduate which they deserve their goal. It is
diagreed
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disagreed
agreed
 that
money
 is the most
esseatial
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essential
 thing
of
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about
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 getting a job.
People
satifaction
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satisfaction
 in that job as well as knowledge and experience being
a head
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ahead
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 of the
salary
.
Firstly
,
employee
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employees
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 prefer
more
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apply
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with
good
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the good
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 working environment and employment support.
They
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areThey
wereThey
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 happy to complete their
work
 and
having
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have
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a
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the
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 best
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teamwork
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team
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teamwork
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work
 to support them in
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difficult situation. Even they got
the
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a
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 high or low
salary
.
For example
, a project team seem to get
high
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a high
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salary
 and they need to have the best co-worker to
complet
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complete
 their
work
 on time.
Therefore
people
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,people
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 who deserve
high
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a high
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salary
 and
feeling
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feel
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stress
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stressed
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 to do their
work
,
they
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apply
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can not get a good working
result
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results
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.
Secondly
, some
people
 only think about
the
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money
 rather than their education
skill
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skills
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.
Sometime
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 they
work
 in a position
that is
 not related to their background of
study
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the study
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. They prefer what position will provide them
more
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with more
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money
.
For instance
, some
people
 who study teaching are going to
work
 in the school or university, but they choose another
postion
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position
option
 to get
high
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a high
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salary
 rather than being a teacher. It is not a good point for them due to they get only experience, but they can not improve the knowledge of their field of study. To sum up,
money
 is
apart
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a part
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 of
people
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people's
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life
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live
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, but not the best important for workers. They need to consider
careful
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carefully
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 about
other specific point
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another specific point
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 of that job before they apply to that position. In my opinion,
money
 consideration will substitute with the
satifaction
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satisfaction
 and working condition when
people
 want to engage in
working
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the working
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 sector.
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