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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages ?

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Nowadays, it is daunting to choose a proper
place
 for living.
However
, most
people
 will prefer to settle at a
place
that is
 close to their birthplace. Certainly, there are various causes for
this
 emergence.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for
this
 along with its merits and demerits.
To begin
 with, staying close to their hometown provides
people
 with an opportunity to stay connected with family members. When an individual lives nearby his parents or siblings, it becomes easy to reach out to them in their time of need.
Consequently
, it will minimize the sense of loneliness and depression in a person. What's more, as the
people
 are familiar with the surrounding areas adjusting to the community becomes effortless.
Therefore
, it is recommended to live close to one's native
place
 as it gives a feeling of affinity and improves emotional connection.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages to
this
 way of living.
Firstly
, sometimes these arrangements may restrict an aspirant to achieve his goal. Because he cannot go too far from his homeland to pursue his target and is coerced to settle for less.
For instance
, when I was opting for a University education, I had to give up on selecting the IT stream, as admissions were full in my town's college.
Secondly
, living in the same region will
also
 refrain
people
 to explore other cities. Opting to live in different places with a certain group of
people
 will provide a wider perspective to look at things differently. In conclusion, most
people
 spent a major part of their lives in the houses that are near to the
place
 where they are born. Despite
this
 trend cease them to achieve their aspirations and constrict their knowledge,
people
 still opt for
this
 style of living as it provides social and mental well-being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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