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It is important for children to learn the difference between right an dwrong at an eraly age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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It is argued that
children
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 should be taught at a young age to know the difference between what are the right
things
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 to do and which bad
behaviors
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behaviours
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 should be avoided at any cost
if
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that
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even means to use
punishments
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.
From
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 my
opinions
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opinion
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, I completely agree with
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 idea and delve into
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 issue to describe which form of
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punishments
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 should be used by
parents
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 and
teachers
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 in order to archive better characteristics for
children
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.
Children
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 have very little
understandings
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understanding
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 of the world as they have only lived a few years of
the
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 life. So,
parents
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 and
teachers
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 are the only ones who will teach them good manners and
behaviors
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 to become
the
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responsible adults in
the
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 social life when they become older. They are easy to be taught since they have already interested in everything as those years are the learning years of the human as well as they are likely to rebel against the adults.
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, if they are not educated enough at an early age, they will have a tendency to do wrong
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 when they become teenagers. By virtue of that, the increasing numbers of delinquents and juveniles around the world
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 the proof of
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 phenomenon what if
things
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 are not handled good enough. Because of the aforementioned matters, punishment has
been become
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the
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 necessary part of the system for
children
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. The most effective way of teaching
children
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 is rewarding and
punishments
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. We can't just only give
punishments
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 to the young if they did bad
things
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 but we
also
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 need to give rewards
they
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if they
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 did great
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.
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,
punishments
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 should not be bodily or mentally hurt
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children
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 because those can give traumas to them.
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,
parents
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 should not spank or yell
to
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at
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 their
children
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 as
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punishments
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instead
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 of
them
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children
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 need to put their pocket money
to
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 punishment jars every time they did something bad and they get sweets and ice creams as rewards if they did counterparts. As for
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, they can give more home
works
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 to students as punishment forms and finish classes early or
giving
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 applauses to the ones who are clever. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that it is not
like
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a big deal if adults ignore these factors,
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,
consequences
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the consequences
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 of
this
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 phenomenon can be greatly
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 in the future. So,
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should try to take these simple ways to shape the futures of
children
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.
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