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children who are brought up in the family that do not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problem when they come adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parent. do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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a unidirectional
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 way might seem to be allusive as
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the scenario
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scenario
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 of individual lives may be different. Whether
children
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 from wealthy family less likely to be prepared as compared to
children
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belong
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 to
poor
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the poor
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family
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families
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 when they become adults. I will be
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discussing
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childhood to teenager,
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the child
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child
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children
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 will likely
to
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face difficulty as they
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pick up
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pickup
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pick up
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 information from their
parents
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grassroots
grassroot
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 level.
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,
children
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 from wealthier
faimilies
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families
 used to get
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 more to learn in the terms of technical advancements,
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 environment to fight for
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. Their
parents
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 are often sterned in
bussiness
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business
 practices.
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,
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child
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children
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 do not get enough
time
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 to interact with
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/her
parents
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 which allows them to grasp
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 for
solution
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solutions
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.
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,
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 are working
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professionals
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.
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, are not available to
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receive
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child
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children
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 from school to home. The
child
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 is provided
a
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key to access the house and should take lunch by himself/herself which
make
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 him/her
resposible
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responsible
 for their
ownself
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.
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, The tactics initiated by the
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 with a level of intellectual mind
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child
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the child
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to
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learn about the complex problem. At
very
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 small age they understand the long term life goals with the predictive problems.
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, the
high class
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 education gives them the insights to
coupe
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cope
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up
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with difficulties. In
fact
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,fact
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 they are being put into the condition by teachers where they have to think of
the
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 solution.
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, instant guidance in terms of education, physical fitness,
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and daily
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 routines
enable
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 them to get prepared as they will get more engaged in their professional life.
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,
children
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 are tutored by coaching institutes after school hours enabling them to
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cope
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coupe
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cope
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up
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with the educational difficulties in a wider prospect which eventually helps them to develop
the
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critical thinking abilities. All in all, the
children
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 of wealthier families are liable to learn
a
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short period of
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that
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includes
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time consuming
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 difficulties. But
eventually
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 they get used to it and are ready to apply the solutions in
real
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real-time
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time
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situation
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situations
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 by the
time
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 they become
adult
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adults
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.

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