children who are brought up in the family that do not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problem when they come adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parent. do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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way might seem to be allusive as
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of individual lives may be different. Whether
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from wealthy family less likely to be prepared as compared to
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to
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when they become adults. I will be
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childhood to teenager,
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the child
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face difficulty as they
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information from their
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grassroots
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level.
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from wealthier
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families
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more to learn in the terms of technical advancements,
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environment to fight for
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. Their
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are often sterned in
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business
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do not get enough
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which allows them to grasp
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problem
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for
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solutions
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.
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are working
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.
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from school to home. The
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key to access the house and should take lunch by himself/herself which
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him/her
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with a level of intellectual mind
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to
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learn about the complex problem. At
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small age they understand the long term life goals with the predictive problems.
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, the
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education gives them the insights to
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up
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with difficulties. In
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they are being put into the condition by teachers where they have to think of
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solution.
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routines
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them to get prepared as they will get more engaged in their professional life.
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are tutored by coaching institutes after school hours enabling them to
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coupe
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up
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with the educational difficulties in a wider prospect which eventually helps them to develop
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critical thinking abilities. All in all, the
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of wealthier families are liable to learn
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short period of
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that
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includes
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time consuming
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difficulties. But
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they get used to it and are ready to apply the solutions in
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time
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situation
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by the
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they become
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adults
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