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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.

#people #animals #zoos
The line graph below
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 about average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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, let's take a look at CO2 emissions in metric tonnes
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 Portugal. We can see that it's increasing smoothly from 1 to 2
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 1967 until 1977. And from 1977 to 1987, the CO2 emissions in metric tonnes still grow up from 2 to nearly 4. But from 1987 to 1997,
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 up rapidly to nearly 6 And until 2007, it's still nearly 6.
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 is Italy, from 1967 to 1977, it's increasing dramatically from nearly 4 to nearly 6, until 1997, it's rising slowly to nearly 8, until 2007, it's still
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 nearly 8.
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, let's look at Sweden, from 1967 to 1997,
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 up from 8 to 10 from 1977,
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 up from 8 to 10, from 1977 to 1987,
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decrease
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 dramatically, until 2007, it's still decreasing slowly.
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 Kingdom, from 1967 to 1977,
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 for nearly 10. But from 1977 to 1987,
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 down until 2007. So that we can see the line graph show us CO2 emission in metric tonnes at Portugal and Italy is increasing and Sweden and
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 Kingdom is decreasing.
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