At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Societies are responsible to determine the future of countries. These days, the population of middle-aged reaches at the peaked, which is opposite

with

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the

number

of elderly ones.

This

essay will discuss both these standpoints. On the

one

hand, there are several opportunities that we will gain from

higher

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number

of young generations.

Firstly

, it may increase the

number of

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productivity as more

people

are working.

Thus

, the new innovation might breed as well as the new perspective,

consequently

, a developing country could turn into a developed

one

in just

few

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years.

For instance

,

to build

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a start-up company has been popular these days,

this

company mostly is run by a group of fresh graduate students who bring

new

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idea

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in

this

digitalized era.

One

of them is GO-JEK, a well-known company which creates a huge

number

of jobs for unemployment in Indonesia.

Secondly

, when a

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consider

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number

of

people

are working means

increasing

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amount of income that

country

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the country

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gain

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. As an illustration, when all industries are reaching their optimal productivity,

then

, they will probably obtain more money and could afford to pay

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the tax.

This

tax can be located for improving the facility of countries.

On the other hand

, The high population of young

people

might affect negatively as

this

period of time might be full of risks,

thus

, the authority has a bigger responsibility to direct the residents.

This

young group must have multiple skills that help them to compete with others.

Beside

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this

, the authority should

also

create more job opportunities.

Otherwise

, criminal cases will certainly leap because many

people

are

being

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unemployment.

For example

, recently there was an increasing

number

of criminal cases in Indonesia, many robbery cases occurred several nights and when the police arrested the gangster, most of them were in

20s

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. To conclude,

this

era of population growth might be the challenging

one

as the government has a lot of jobs.

Nonetheless

, when they could educate their society and train their skills,

then

, many improvements will definitely happen in the country. Thence, the administration should prepare it well before facing

this

period by giving well-educated

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, a free skilled training, and

socialize

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it.