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globalization is positive for economics, but it’s negative side should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#globalization #economics #it’s #side
The graph below gives us some information about the average carbon dioxide
emissions
 per
person
 in 4 countries: the United
Kingdom
,
Sweden
, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. As you can see, in
the
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1967, the United
Kingdom
 had
a
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 highest
number
 of carbon dioxide
emissions
 per
person
 with over 10
in
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metric
tonnes
.
In
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 the other hand, Portugal had the lowest
place
 in the graph with just nearly 2 in metric
tonnes
.
Sweden
 had more than 8 in the metric
tonnes
 and had had the
second
place
 below the United
Kingdom
. Italy in 1967 has
a
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 average
number
 of carbon dioxide
emissions
 per
person
 twice as much as Portugal with more than 4 in metric
tonnes
. From 1967 to 2007, the United
Kingdom
's CO2
emissions
 per
person
has
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 decreased significantly from more than 10 to 9
in
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the metric
tonnes
. The CO2
emissions
 in
Sweden
has
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 increased very much from over 8 to more than 10 in 10 years.
However
,
Sweden
's CO2
emissions
has
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dratically
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drastically
dramatically
 decreased from 1987 to 2007. Both
Italy
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Italy's
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 and Portugal's CO2
emissions
 rose throughout 40 years. In 2007, Italy took
the
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2nd
place
in
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 the graph.
Otherwise
,
Sweden
 and Portugal had the same
number
 of
Co
@
emission
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. To sum
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 everything that has been started, the United
Kingdom
 and
Sweden
 which had the highest
place
 in 1967,
has
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 decreased.
In contrast
, Italy and Portugal
has
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 increased the
number
 of Co2
emissions
 in 40 years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented economic integration
  • efficient distribution
  • economic growth
  • income inequality
  • concentrated wealth
  • multinational corporations
  • environmental degradation
  • climate change
  • overexploitation
  • carbon emissions
  • cultural exchange
  • cultural homogenization
  • Western consumer culture
  • fair trade practices
  • environmental regulations
  • equitably distributed benefits
  • socially responsible
  • environmentally responsible
  • mitigate
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