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globalization is positive for economics, but it’s negative side should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#globalization #economics #it’s #side
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The graph below gives us some information about the average carbon dioxide
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 in 4 countries: the United
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, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. As you can see, in
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1967, the United
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 had more than 8 in the metric
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 twice as much as Portugal with more than 4 in metric
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 increased very much from over 8 to more than 10 in 10 years.
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dratically
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Italy
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 everything that has been started, the United
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 which had the highest
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 in 1967,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented economic integration
  • efficient distribution
  • economic growth
  • income inequality
  • concentrated wealth
  • multinational corporations
  • environmental degradation
  • climate change
  • overexploitation
  • carbon emissions
  • cultural exchange
  • cultural homogenization
  • Western consumer culture
  • fair trade practices
  • environmental regulations
  • equitably distributed benefits
  • socially responsible
  • environmentally responsible
  • mitigate
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