It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree?

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culture
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place is not related to
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directly to that
country
, they can get more
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by looking for the original book or surfing
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the website. I
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completely
disagree with that opinion due to learning a new thing from original
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resources
is only the
part
of that
country
.
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,
traveling
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to another
country
not just learning about a new culture, but
also
making more
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via face to face.
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countries they
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friend
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they can make.
For instance
,
people
from Asia countries
travel
to European countries are going to learn a new
cuture
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culture
of the European
such
as food, tourism, communication and so on.
However
, learning a
cuture
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culture
through some books and
internet
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the internet
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are
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just a
part
of the knowledge, but not getting any experience of it.
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, learning many different types of the language is
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crucial
part
for
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travel
. Even though
people
seem to be spending
to
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much money on
travel
,
but
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they can learn a new language and communication
skill
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from other
people
surround
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them.
For example
,
people
who have
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ability can attend other
country
language class and they can make
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friends
friend
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different
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kind of
cuture
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culture
. In conclusion,
traveling
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is an essential
part
for
people
who need to learn
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new culture
in addition
to
the
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their reading and surfing.
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